“That’s it! My patience is running thin and I am at the end of my tether!” I lamented furiously. This was not the first time my classmates called me a nerd. I was walking with heavy steps and dragging my feet home from school. It was such a tiring day after a whole day of work! I decided to take the shortest route that is quite deserted.
Suddenly, someone caught my attention. Was I dreaming? I could not believe what I had seen. It was our school’s head prefect, Kelly. She was with two boys extorting money from a young boy named Jack. Muscles were bulging out from the boy’s broad arms. Their eyes were twinkling with mischief. They were in a group of gang trying to bully a small and scrawny boy. I could see a smirk on Kelly’s lips. Her penetrating eyeballs and an evil glint shot me a glance. She also had a sinister smile on her face.
“Give me all your money now!” one of the boys, Chris, shouted at him. Kelly ordered them to punch Jack if he refused to give them. Chris pulled Jack’s collar and threatened him to take out all his money. He was staring daggers at Jack. They were clenching their fists, ready to punch him. The terrifying apparition approached him with an evil, menacing smirk on its face. He was petrified out of his wits. He was paralysed with fear. Tears started to stream down his cheeks.
Those words from the gangster weighed me down like an anchor. My heart sank, body iced and mind blanked in an instant. Should I help him? He was wobbling like a jelly. Tension and fear mounted. Plucking up my courage, I immediately ran towards them and tried to prevent him from being bullied by any of them. She was about to give him a punch but luckily I shielded the young boy.
“I... thought you are...a head prefect,” I mumbled and my heart was palpitating wildly. Would I get into serious trouble? My heart thumping faster and faster each time frightening thoughts raced through my mind.
“Shut your gap! Do you think that I really care about it?” Kelly sneered. I realised that she was actually a hypocrite. The two boys were standing at the side crackling their knuckles. They were all showing signs of impatience and were ready to punch us at any point of time. Being a kong fu expert , I decided to use the easiest way to tackle them. I brought them to the ground each at a time and they were all groaned in agony. I could not imagine that I was so brave and strong.
Without hesitation, Kelly and her gang fled the scene. Fortunately, we did not suffer from severe injuries. It was such a traumatic experience for Jack and me. I did not know Kelly had such a bad personality. He thanked me ceaselessly for shielding him. He wanted to reward me with a handphone but I declined it politely. Actually, he came from a very rich background that was found out by Kelly so they planned to extort money from Jack.
The next day, the principal announced about the incident. Kelly was ashamed and hung her head in mortification. Her face was full of regrets but it was too late. We could not turn back the clock. I was no longer called a nerd but a hero...
Monday, September 8, 2008
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1 comment:
Good improvement. I'm ok with the plot.
Good vocab and descriptions but still quite a lot of errors.
Maybe you would like to print for me to edit for you. Leave space between lines for me to edit.
Good job though.
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